Talk:Gay liberation

This article contains a translation of Gay liberation from en.wikipedia.

The complex words

Before I can simplify, I've gotta know what complex words are for this article. Can someone please tell me? Angela Maureen (talk) 19:13, 26 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Here are my comments:

complex words: ~~urged, reveal,~~ precursor
The article talks about "gay liberation movements", plural. There was only one gay liberation movement, even if more than one country was involved.
The first sentence should say what gay liberation is. The information about when the movement was active should go in a separate sentence. This is actually something I've seen in other articles you created: the first sentence should always say what the subject is, not give other kinds of general information about it.
~~The last sentence should start with the word "The".~~

--Auntof6 (talk) 20:50, 26 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I changed some words, rearranged the sentence areas. Angela Maureen (talk) 21:29, 26 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I've struck out the items above that have been taken care of. A couple more comments:

"Coming out" means to show one's sexual orientation, not one's sexuality. There's a difference.
It says "The movement happened most often". This is not good wording, but right now I don't know what it should be. Maybe another editor will see this note and suggest something.

When you are ready for me to look again, please reply here and not on my talk page. Thanks. --Auntof6 (talk) 22:07, 28 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I took care of the "coming out" section, and reworded another sentence region in the article. Should it be simple now? Angela Maureen (talk) 00:10, 30 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

It still needs "movements" and "precursor" taken care of. --Auntof6 (talk) 06:04, 30 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Changed movements, removed precursor. Should it be simple now? Angela Maureen (talk) 11:46, 30 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

It's better, but "herald" isn't a simple word, either, and doesn't even mean the same thing as "precursor". Make sure you yourself know what "precursor" means, then think about how you would explain it to someone whose vocabulary wasn't very big. --Auntof6 (talk) 16:15, 30 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I've reworded the sayings about Stonewall riots playing a part in Gay liberation. Angela Maureen (talk) 16:39, 30 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Is the article simple enough for own page? Angela Maureen (talk) 23:15, 31 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Now I think you're just guessing. Do you know what "precursor" means? (Hint: it doesn't mean that it played a part in something.) --Auntof6 (talk) 02:51, 1 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I've reworded this article. Should I take out reference to the Stonewall riots entirely? Angela Maureen (talk) 10:45, 1 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Harbinger" is a little closer to "precursor", but I think it's even more complex. It would be a shame to remove the part about the Stonewall riots, because it was such an important thing. However, if you want to take it out, I think the article would be ready to go back to mainspace. --Auntof6 (talk) 20:40, 1 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Unfortunately, had to remove that reference to the Stonewall riots. Couldn't find any non-complex words for the precursor. Angela Maureen (talk) 22:08, 1 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Stonewall riots

Auntof6 and Angela, I think I can help put that back in. It is an important part of the history. I have put my version in, now that this is in mainspace. Hope it passes as simple enough. Thanks, Fylbecatulous talk 15:35, 3 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]